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    dots Submission Name: Real and Alivedots

    Author: Martha McEntire
    ASL Info:    34/f/Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 27/25/22
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsReal and Alivedots

    I am real and alive
    as long as my heart beats.
    I did not ask to be here
    you have brought me into this.
    And now I can feel the emotions
    emotions inside you that are part of me.
    I have a heart that beats
    right along with yours.
    You think that doing this
    is the only way out.
    Do I not deserve a chance?
    A chance to live my life?
    To be a child and grow into an adult.
    My soul tells me
    it won't be long now.
    I will be back in heaven
    with my Father.
    He will forgive you
    for what you are about to do.
    But can you ever forgive yourself
    for the pain that you have put me through?
    I am real and alive
    but you still are going to kill me.

    Submitted on 2006-11-29 16:25:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      im not sure how he's going to kill you, but i hope you avoid being killed (literally or figurativly). people kill us all the time. whether they do it intentionally or not, thats a different story. and, on the flip side, we kill people. it just happens. i liked the poem. it flowed very well and didnt lose me. very nice, very nice.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]

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