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    dots Submission Name: Mindless Souldots

    Author: Martha McEntire
    ASL Info:    34/f/Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 27/25/22
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsMindless Souldots

    I'm lost in the mindless soul of life.
    I've tried to climb out
    and I've screamed out for help.
    Is anyone out there?
    Is anyone truly listening?
    The world is dark here
    the rain comes from all the tears I've cried.
    Seems like I've lost
    all hope of tomorrow.
    I've buried myself in this
    hopless state of sorrow.
    No more sun
    No more rainbows.
    All I see is the darkness
    that surrounds me.
    I'm lost in the mindless soul of life.

    Submitted on 2006-11-29 17:32:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love it...It is dark and the feelings that are writen come out of the words and surround the reader in them. I think that this is well writen and I think that it is one of my favorites. I like the darkness in it.
    | Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by Lover girl | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a nice poem a little dark but arent we all?

    the whole thing where you mention the no sun no more rainbows was really cool because that my friend to be blunt would suck

    any way nice read good imagry

    | Posted on 2006-12-05 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this poem. It was a pleasure to read, in spite of the dark subject matter. I particularly liked how you began and ended the poem with such a great line:

    I'm lost in the mindless soul of life.

    Nice job. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by oixi | [ Reply to This ]

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