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    dots Submission Name: I love you, I need youdots
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    Author: Martha McEntire
    ASL Info:    34/f/Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 27/25/22
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
    Total Views: 754
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    I love you, I need you
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    For starters, I love you, I need you!
    I want you with all my being.
    I long to hold you against my breast.
    To have you kiss my neck
    and to feel your breath
    on my skin is what I dream about.
    To know that you will always need
    and want me puts a smile on my face.
    Time will never change that
    no matter what!
    My life is complete with you in it,
    My life would be nothing if you
    stopped loving me for one second.
    So from the beginning to the end,
    I love you, I need you!







    Submitted on 2006-11-29 17:34:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This has great emotion and passion...I love how it flows! The imagry put into this is really well writen I like the line "I want you with all my being. I long to hold you against my breast." It is intamint and sensual...I hope that whoever you wrote this about can see how much talent you have.
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    Katie
    | Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by Lover girl | [ Reply to This ]


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