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    dots Submission Name: Tell Medots
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    Author: Martha McEntire
    ASL Info:    34/f/Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 27/25/22
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
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    dotsTell Medots
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    Tell Me
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    tell me how someone can be so lost
    lost without time to tell.
    tell me how someone can feel
    feel all that is all around.
    tell me what it is that i long for
    long for the night to disappear.
    tell me who it is that i look upon
    look upon now that you are gone.
    tell me how to mend my heart
    a heart that is so broken that time cannot fix.
    tell me no more lies
    lies about your feelings and love for me.
    tell me where to go
    go into the spirit of another love?
    tell me that i can't live without you
    without you i cannot live.
    someone please tell me!!!








    Submitted on 2006-11-29 17:37:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really felt the emotion and passion put into this poem...Good job. My favorite part was
    "tell me how to mend my heart
    a heart that is so broken that time cannot fix." That is heart felt
    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by Lover girl | [ Reply to This ]


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