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    dots Submission Name: Six Silent Tearsdots
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    Author: Martha McEntire
    ASL Info:    34/f/Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 27/25/22
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
    Total Views: 885
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Six Silent Tears
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    Last night before I went to bed
    thoughts of you filled my troubled head.
    Though I've not cried this way in years
    onto my pillow fell six silent tears.
    The first was for your smile I miss
    and the tender cheek I long to kiss.
    The second was for your angel face
    and the thoughts of your warm loving embrace.
    The third come as no surprise
    as I thought of your beautiful king eyes.
    After this the fourth come welling
    instead of my pillow it was you I should have been holding.
    The fifth come for one reason alone
    I felt my love for you was not fully shown.
    I really miss you my dear, there,
    just fell the sixth silent tear.







    Submitted on 2006-11-29 19:48:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very emotional and deep, great poem, sad but i enjoyed it.
    gerry
    | Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...This is very goon I liked the line "Though I've not cried this way in years onto my pillow fell six silent tears." It is very emotional and heart felt...I take off my hat to you. Well...I would if I wore a hat!
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by Lover girl | [ Reply to This ]
      very emotional and heart-felt yet simple enough to keep it's true value...good write!!!!
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]
      I realy liked this, it was easy to place yourself into. Good job!
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by FLHgg | [ Reply to This ]
      this was short, sweet, to the point, but didn't lack in depth. it ready very easy
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by lauren hamill | [ Reply to This ]
      This was REALLY nice. I loved it. Other than your rhyming was off in a couple of places, this poem was perfect. I've had nights like this, but I usually get more tears, I guess your a lucky one. lol This was a really great poem. Keep up the nice work.

    ----Katty
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by hellsangel | [ Reply to This ]


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