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    dots Submission Name: Crunchdots

    Author: brokenroses
    ASL Info:    17/m/indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 191/192/62
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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       remember when you were a little kid and you had been sledding all day, and you had to run for what seemed like miles to get back home?

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    The soft white snow
    Slips under soles.
    The ever quick
    And careless caress
    Of never delicate
    Unbending boots
    Kisses the tops of


    Snow drift banks.
    The cold bitter air
    Bites my nose
    And numbs my hands
    To bitter white
    Useless stubs.
    Thoughts race round
    A million miles an hour
    Vision slowly scans
    White snow blur.


    Almost home now
    Boot race blur.
    Cold nose run
    Fingers gone numb.
    Apple pie dreams
    With warm fireplace.
    My ears burn warm
    And my rosy nose runs.
    My short jog home
    Was a winter wonderland.

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      Haha, nicely done and I did like this. But I don't really know what else to say, therefore I will say no more. But I did like it.

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