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Totus anctus


Author: Katrinagolden
ASL Info:    27/F/chicago
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Words: 134
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Totus anctus is Latin for a in a world of pain. These are just thoughts. Lately I have had trouble writing so I thought that if I just write maybe the inspiration will come back. Let me know what you think.


Totus anctus



Is love merely a fatal wound
That drives a spear to your soul
And watches as it bleeds
Torturing every single part of you

Is love the eternal burden
That forces Atlas to shrug
And makes your world a slave to it
And it is master of it all

In a world of hurt and pain
Love is the eternal medicine
That cures your woes
And with a single dose
It fixes almost everything

Yet with that single dose
Comes the curse
For while it may be medicine
It is also a fatal poison

So if to love is to be a slave to a single master
Which would you prefer to love and be chained
Or to never love at all and be free




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  hard question i still think that i would rather love myself as for every ounce of pain you recieve 10 ounces of love i guess

anycase i enjoyed this piece thank you

Timmy S. Edgar
| Posted on 2008-10-07 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]
  That is certianly a question for the ages. Is is better to have never loved to avoid the pain.

Of course not. Go bravely into the world with out any armor, ready to take an arrow in your heart. If one pierces you, rip it out with a scream and get up and keep going on.

Donn
| Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by D McDaniel | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't believe that love fatal. I think control is. When people feel that they have to be in a relationship with somebody else and feel that they have to kiss and hug and all that crap makes "love" fatal. Love is the purest form of affection and can't ever hurt you. The feeling that you have to live happily ever after makes it fatal. I rather love at least once in my life because even if we aren't connected on a relationship level love never dies and we will always be friend. We will always be there for each other no matter what.

I LOVE YOU ANA! Remember that too
| Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by Midnight_Rose | [ Reply to This ]
  mmm... I really like your idea but I feel that while you were writing this you were holding something back or you had a lot on your mind because it sounds very choppy. I like your words and the point that you are trying to convey. I loved your title In a world of pain it sounds so beutiful but I feel that if you work on it a little more it could be a really strong piece. I want you to tell me your thoughts on love, the general idea and questions that you have but I want you to make this personal. I want you to really let loose, shed everything and just write what you feel.

hope you take my advice love you andy
| Posted on 2006-12-07 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]
  mmm... I really like your idea but I feel that while you were writing this you were holding something back or you had a lot on your mind because it sounds very choppy. I like your words and the point that you are trying to convey. I loved your title In a world of pain it sounds so beutiful but I feel that if you work on it a little more it could be a really strong piece. I want you to tell me your thoughts on love, the general idea and questions that you have but I want you to make this personal. I want you to really let loose, shed everything and just write what you feel.

hope you take my advice love you andy
| Posted on 2006-12-07 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]
  mmm... I really like your idea but I feel that while you were writing this you were holding something back or you had a lot on your mind because it sounds very choppy. I like your words and the point that you are trying to convey. I loved your title In a world of pain it sounds so beutiful but I feel that if you work on it a little more it could be a really strong piece. I want you to tell me your thoughts on love, the general idea and questions that you have but I want you to make this personal. I want you to really let loose, shed everything and just write what you feel.

hope you take my advice love you andy
| Posted on 2006-12-07 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]


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