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    dots Submission Name: Open Eyesdots
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    Author: SinCeer05
    ASL Info:    21mVA
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 243/279/168
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1063
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    Bytes: 921



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    dotsOpen Eyesdots
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    If Im Powerless When The Hour Tests,
    Open Eye In The Barrel, No Coward Ness
    Instead Of My Eyes Shut To Blink, I Man Up An Think
    Death Is An Edge To A Landscape An Iím On The Brink
    Pontificating Decisions, To My Self Alone To Scrape Dignity From Inside
    Exonerating Provisions Lead Me To Stray From Hates Epiphany In Stride
    Arms To Pump, And Knees To Bend, As I Breathe To Escape Past The Breeze And Wind
    In A Marathon Of Thoughts, I Crease In Sin, I Fold To The Devil And Release Again
    I Exhale With Hope, Like The Smoke From The Exhaust Of A Truck
    Through A Chamber Of Anger, Iím Broke Within A Holocaust Of Muck
    Through The Cost Of Luck, The Rage In Waves, In A Way It Paves My Days
    As The Cement Of Truth Settles To Mold, The Bitterness Slaves My Gaze







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    ||| Comments |||
      Can you write more like this and write articles???

    Let me know..

    R. Tamm
    editor@rashpublishing.com
    http://www.rashpublishing.com
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by RashPub | [ Reply to This ]
      hey bubz, this is real good, u talk of truth and of real life, sumthing hard to capture and write about, nice flow n rhyme too,
    keep em cummin
    kyrenia x
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]


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