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    dots Submission Name: LIFE THROUGH A WINDOWdots
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    Author: bigrig0625
    ASL Info:    34 M Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 40/73/19
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 976
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 788



    Description:
       Yadda yadda yadda, same old song and dance. I just write it down to make me feel better. If you read this I hope you enjoy it. If you do then Thank you and if you don't then i'm sorry it wasn't better. Once again it's just an insight into my mind and how I perceive life.


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    dotsLIFE THROUGH A WINDOWdots
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    Life through a window
    I'm happy to see
    The people who pass
    but don't notice me

    I sit here alone
    No friend yet to share
    They don't come inside
    I'm glad they don't care

    Life through a window
    Don't dare go outside
    It's safer in here
    So easy to hide

    I peek through the blinds
    Make sure that there's light
    For darkness is coming
    To hender my sight

    Life through a window
    I claw at the pane
    I'm still when you pass
    To look like i'm sane

    You cannot imagine
    Nor can you tell
    Life through a window
    I hide it so well







    Submitted on 2006-11-30 13:49:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't think it's as much agoraphobic as metaphoric. I see it as more of someone who might portray themself on the outside differently than they feel on the inside in order to keep from being hurt. Not a literal window, but a front that's different than your true self.

    It's a very interesting poem.
    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by Lynda | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed reading this poem. Its simple. Sometimes its better to watch life through a window and not get involved in anything. Keeps you outa trouble.

    yeahhh awsome poem i digged iyt.

    peace out
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a good write, but very sad. sad that you feel you have to hide yourself away. sounds like depression. feeling you're going insane, yet acting so normal on the outside. (who defines normal anyway??)
    like the others have said, this could mean many things.
    the poem has nice flow. a good read all in all, and something many will relate to.
    nice work, bigrig!!
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...very good...you could imagine lots of things with this one..and i like that..a new thought with each time you read it...*martha
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by Martha McEntire | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty cool man. A bit vouyerist, and a bit agoraphobic it seems. The words, and rymes graph together well, and it gave me a vision partly of myself, and partly of an old man recluse, posibly a social deviant of sorts. Maybe a pervert gazing at highschool girls at 3:30pm, undressing them with his eyes.... Okay I'm going a bit to far, but you get the point. Good work
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by Ratmeat | [ Reply to This ]


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