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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 518
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1089



    Description:
       i screwed up at the bottom....it's supposed to say...."ashley i love you" on the same line

    this is a poem to my new girlfriend which i barely met but love very much!


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    just cuz i dont know her much
    doesnt mean i cant love her
    my feelings, my emotions, Everything!
    it alll goes wild when she does that purr
    i go crazy over the sound of it
    but when it comes from her its different
    i'm not sure how, but it is
    it sounds so real but reality is bent
    i love her, i truly do
    but i want to show her how much!
    how do i show her so she knows i mean it
    cuz i sure as hell can't do it with a touch
    or can i?...NO...i want to show her
    show her how i really do feel
    i think of her constantly as i'm not around her
    i want to say "Ashley, this is real"
    i know it is....i hope it is
    i hope shes the one that helps me
    with her life is fun
    it's no fun without her
    for some reason, she means everything to me
    she makes me feel better, i want her to know
    by my words, letters, & poems"ashley, i love
    you




    Submitted on 2006-11-30 16:37:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My, my... Now isn't this energetic, it's electric with emotion, I detect longing, true passion, not lust, but I feel you really do love this girl, Ashley. I wish you the best of luck...

    Acid
    | Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by Acid | [ Reply to This ]
      So you did get her huh? Way to go man! I'm glad it worked out.


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    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]


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