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    dots Submission Name: Boulder next to the shore.dots
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    Author: Darklonelygirl
    ASL Info:    16/f/va
    Elite Ratio:    1.87 - 148/90/61
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 98
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 1161



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    dotsBoulder next to the shore.dots
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    I am a boulder next to the shore.
    Beaten and battered from the hostile storms,
    all I can do is just feel the everlasting pain.

    Deadlocked to this one spot,
    I stare at my motionless view.
    Nothing changes day-to-day,
    The world is only dark and gray.

    Endless tides of sorrow and regret,
    bring with them tormenting swells
    My outside has hardened over the years,
    But yet, the whitecapped waves still break though my stone exterior.
    The icy ocean fills every unhidden crack and crevece

    Piece by piece, the violent current grinds me down.
    Pretty soon, I'll only be a tiny pebble in the ground.

    Underneath my inflexible skin, I cry at that thought.
    I want to speak out and be heard,
    To tell someone about my suffering.
    To let them know I can feel pain too.

    Yet I cannot...
    I'm powerless to say or do anything,
    I can only fake a smile and take the beating.
    For I am, a dwindling boulder next to the shore, only that and nothing more.








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      "For I am, a dwindling boulder next to the shore, only that and nothing more."

    Reminiscent of one line in Edgar Allan Poe's The Raven.
    You personified one of the objects we see in daily life, a rock sitting on the shore. Not something anybody'd think much of, but now will notice better.

    "Piece by piece, the violent current grinds me down.
    Pretty soon, I'll only be a tiny pebble in the ground."

    That seems to haunt the reader somehow, perhaps an eventual omen of themselves being reduced to pebbles..
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      Understand it....I lived it too...It has good flow/movement.Easy to read,understand and feel.
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by Postillion | [ Reply to This ]
      hey that has alot of thought its really good I enjoyed reading it, hope you write more good poems, I will always read, ty
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]


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