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    dots Submission Name: Numbdots
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    Author: bloodydreamer27
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 54/130/78
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 602
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       Just popped into my head, because of this icon. Well tell me what you think


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    What doesnt kill me,
    Numbs me to the bone.
    Makes my once warm heart,
    Into an icey stone.
    Makes me cry every night,
    Just by thinking of you.
    And all the fun things,
    That we used to do.

    I miss you and love you,
    But you'll never again be mine.
    And with that my heart has grown,
    To finally be fine.
    It's grown to understand,
    That we don't always get what we want.
    And no longer will the memories,
    Be in my heart to haunt.

    I've gotten over the fact,
    That you're in love with her.
    But sometimes thinking of that,
    Still makes my eyes blurr.
    Cause you were once mine,
    But I foolishly made you leave.
    If I were to be with you once more,
    I would never again be so naive.

    What doesn't kill me,
    Numbs me to the bone.
    I would've stayed with you,
    If only I had known.




    Submitted on 2006-11-30 21:55:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow. this is really good. i'm not sure if i understand how you put your stanzas but there's no forced rhyme that i can see which is really good.
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]


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