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    dots Submission Name: Paper Butterflydots
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    Author: WolfStar
    ASL Info:    26/F/California
    Elite Ratio:    6.85 - 119/130/46
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       I think every person has felt impossible love. Some call it immoral or unethical, but I have always believed that love is always beautiful and and always right. It is the untamed, selfish feeling of lust that taints the virtue of love.

    I will always love the man I call Endymion. What he means to me is immortalized by the effect he has had on my life. Whatever form of it takes, it will always be there.


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    dotsPaper Butterflydots
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    He can pierce my intentions with a needle
    through paper butterfly wings,
    with a hand too familiar
    to the ways and weakness of my skin.

    He knows with a breath
    the color of my desire,
    and with his arctic eyes
    he beckons the river in me.

    The summer wheat can sense the breeze
    preceding my rush of fear,
    the knowledge of my place
    in a land between wanting and taking,
    achieving neither
    and feeding both to lawlessness.

    A single word can be a kiss
    or a brand upon my paper wish,
    and both at once
    with a forbidding sound
    and a sideward glance
    can his tangled thoughts
    be known to me.








    Submitted on 2006-12-01 00:34:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is probably my favorite poem I've ever read on this site. I'm so reading your other stuff!!
    | Posted on 2007-05-26 00:00:00 | by NoMartyr | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow; I'd quote the parts that stood out to me the most, but then I'd have to quote the whole poem.

    "He knows with a breath
    the color of my desire,
    and with his artic eyes
    he beckons the river in me. "

    There seem to be a lot of layers to this poem; the last stanza strikes me as the deepest.

    You endow your description of this person with a lot of mystery and power; he has become a a kind of icon to you, a symbol of love itself, am I close?

    I do have a question or two: in stanza two, line three, did you mean to say "artic eyes" or "arctic eyes"?

    And is this person real, or just based on a real person? You said, "I will always love the man I call Endymion." but you didn't say if that was his names. Why Endymion?

    One more thing; I am going to publish a collection of young people's poetry, most of it from ES, in a little tribute to the talent of today's unknown amateur poet. I'd like to have you permission to include this poem.

    You would get credit for it in the book, but it would probably be copyrighted under my name because it would be very difficult to get an individual copyright for each poem. It could be credited to you in your full name or a pen name.

    Think about it!

    Jen

    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by Jeniffer | [ Reply to This ]


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