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The Golden Chalice


Author: Static Scream
ASL Info:    17/m/Russian(in Mid East)
Elite Ratio:    6.81 - 14 /6 /10
Words: 166
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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The Golden Chalice



Where did I leave the chalice
All golden, gleams of ruby red
It must be somewhere in the palace
Standing at the floor beneath the bed

I look for it and then I wonder
What is it really I'm looking for?
For in all truth I can’t remember
From which book this page I tore

The chalice must be somewhere near
The chalice must be somewhere close
But all I do is stand and fear
That it is still beneath the rose

Oh where did I leave my golden chalice
Is it out there by the sky,
Or is it still there by the window
Watching the strangers walking by?

My golden chalice, where did I leave you?
Or is it me you left?
Or are you here; is it true?
Or has it been a theft?

My golden chalice, unforgotten
Misplaced somewhere around my life
Are you in places so begotten?
I'll never find you in all my strife?




Submitted on 2006-12-01 06:43:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  it's nice, but you might want to make all your lines even. your metaphore is great though


| Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the metaphore and the all the hidden meaning. I don't really have any suggestions, but I just thought I'd say it's really good and I'm definitely adding it to my favorites.
| Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by Venia | [ Reply to This ]
  Really quite excellent, dream-like and gorgeously fantastical...I really, really enjoyed it! (suggestion: if you were even up the lines, perhaps 8 or 10 syllables to the line, this poem would be immensely improved and soar --- in my humble opinion!) bravo ... Bravo ... bravo!!! Michael
| Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
  Beautiful, sometimes playful but very deep when I go and dig for a hidden meaning - a metaphore. I'm sure there has to be an interpretation of this. Again, you strike me with the uniqueness of ideas and fabulous imagery that forsake the paths of your mind to share a gift with a reader. I can't help it but to be left stunned.
| Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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