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    dots Submission Name: The Golden Chalicedots
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    Author: Static Scream
    ASL Info:    17/m/Russian(in Mid East)
    Elite Ratio:    6.81 - 14/6/10
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 151
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1011



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    dotsThe Golden Chalicedots
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    Where did I leave the chalice
    All golden, gleams of ruby red
    It must be somewhere in the palace
    Standing at the floor beneath the bed

    I look for it and then I wonder
    What is it really I'm looking for?
    For in all truth I can’t remember
    From which book this page I tore

    The chalice must be somewhere near
    The chalice must be somewhere close
    But all I do is stand and fear
    That it is still beneath the rose

    Oh where did I leave my golden chalice
    Is it out there by the sky,
    Or is it still there by the window
    Watching the strangers walking by?

    My golden chalice, where did I leave you?
    Or is it me you left?
    Or are you here; is it true?
    Or has it been a theft?

    My golden chalice, unforgotten
    Misplaced somewhere around my life
    Are you in places so begotten?
    I'll never find you in all my strife?




    Submitted on 2006-12-01 06:43:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it's nice, but you might want to make all your lines even. your metaphore is great though


    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the metaphore and the all the hidden meaning. I don't really have any suggestions, but I just thought I'd say it's really good and I'm definitely adding it to my favorites.
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by Venia | [ Reply to This ]
      Really quite excellent, dream-like and gorgeously fantastical...I really, really enjoyed it! (suggestion: if you were even up the lines, perhaps 8 or 10 syllables to the line, this poem would be immensely improved and soar --- in my humble opinion!) bravo ... Bravo ... bravo!!! Michael
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful, sometimes playful but very deep when I go and dig for a hidden meaning - a metaphore. I'm sure there has to be an interpretation of this. Again, you strike me with the uniqueness of ideas and fabulous imagery that forsake the paths of your mind to share a gift with a reader. I can't help it but to be left stunned.
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]



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