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    dots Submission Name: A Christmas Poemdots
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    Author: mugsy
    ASL Info:    60/M/Victoria B.C. Can.
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 129/90/29
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 503
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 432



    Description:
       "A bit of whimsy."


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    dotsA Christmas Poemdots
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    The tiny Christmas tree
    Glimmering like a thousand
    colored stars
    which seemed to wink and blink
    at each individual child
    With happiness instilled in
    their tiny breasts,
    and warmth from hot cocoa,
    they raised their wee voices
    in a carol.
    It was at that moment,
    with tears in my eyes,
    I realized,
    the little bastards
    were off key.......




    Submitted on 2006-12-01 11:59:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      aw. It has comedic value, but at the same time, I was kind of hoping the happiness would continue. Maybe if I wasn't such a christmas freak I'd appreciate the humor more, especially since I'm a musician, and I can't stand it when things are out of tune.

    ah. I am a bit let down that this wasn't the whimsy I anticipated, but I like that it's witty and unconventional, all the same.

    keep writing
    ~Venia
    | Posted on 2007-11-04 00:00:00 | by Venia | [ Reply to This ]
      ah yes one of those beautiful christmas trees lighting up the room and cozy fire warms your heart and just then- you hear the damn neighbor's kids screaming out carols like dying cats.....doncha hate it when that happens?

    Your poem was short & sweet & funny,but maybe it was a little too short.Maybe you could go into it a little more by describing what you throw @ them lmao!....sry..maybe im just high rite now but im still leaving a thoughtful comment...i hope it helped?^________^
    and um i didn't find it to rhyme but hey!im high 'member?
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by _Dancing_Alone_ | [ Reply to This ]
      Classic! I love it.It's funny,I was reading through and almost gave up because I thought it was going to be another one of those soppy,boring, god is great pieces about christmas,but then the word <[censored]s> caught my eye and I did a kind of double-take and went back to read it all the way through.The twist at the end makes it original and humourous-two important poetry traits in my book.Nice one.
    Cheers
    A.C
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by Asakura Cowboy | [ Reply to This ]



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