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    dots Submission Name: anotherdots
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    Author: boo boo
    ASL Info:    18/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 108/104/60
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 587
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    Bytes: 447



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    dotsanotherdots
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    ANOTHER FAILED ATTEMPT TO BE
    ANYTHING BUT ME
    ANOTHER LATE NIGHT FIGHT
    AS YOU GIVE A SHOW OF MIGHT
    ANOTHER BROKEN BONE
    WHY CAN'T YOU JUST LEAVE ME ALONE?
    ANOTHER FADING BRUISE
    JUST ANOTHER FIGHT I'M GONNA LOSE
    ANOTHER YELLING BATTLE
    AS YOU LEAVE ME BRUISED AND BATTERED
    ANOTHER ABUSIVE GUY PRETENDING TO LOVE ME
    FOR SOMEONE OR SOMETHING I'LL JUST NEVER BE!




    Submitted on 2006-12-01 12:01:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good job!!only thing u could improve upon is maybe put it in stanzas?other than that all awsome!!
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]


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