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    dots Submission Name: my little baby girldots
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    Author: boo boo
    ASL Info:    18/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 108/104/60
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsmy little baby girldots
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    The life of my baby violently taken away
    Snatched from my womb
    She never had a chance to make a mistake
    My baby's soul was devoured
    As if it were a virgin being deflowered
    She was burnt within
    Never will her soul bear the stain of sin
    I awoke with sympathy and hate
    I didn't want dying to be my little girls fate
    Never a chance for me to show her my love
    As the dactors sent her to the vast above
    I didn't have achoice in the matter
    At least no bays can pretend to promise her forever
    Letting her be taken has broken my heart
    And it will take forever until the end to forget the hurt
    There won't be no broken hearts for me to heal
    And no secrets to keep with a hug to seal the deal
    Her death it haunts my dreams
    I'll never get to hear her chattering voice or her delighted screams




    Submitted on 2006-12-01 12:02:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      im so sorry for ur loss & this little girls loss,it is so very sad.
    the poem is great,so much feeling,im actually crieing..u put me there as if id been u,i felt what u ment me to,i no that no one will ever feel all the pain u felt,never feel the hurt,the loss.i no no one can ever take away what happened but i am truley sorry.

    safire
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]


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