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    dots Submission Name: WHENdots
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    Author: boo boo
    ASL Info:    18/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 108/104/60
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 699
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 403



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    dotsWHENdots
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    When time slows
    and there's nowhere to go
    Will you think of me
    and all the things we've seen
    When everybody dies
    and sorrowful tears flood your eyes
    Will you remember my name
    and our little secret game
    When sadness fills your home
    and your feeling so alone
    Will you feel my calming touch
    and stop missing me so much?




    Submitted on 2006-12-01 12:03:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow another great poem,i can always understand them,u have a wonderfull way the words.perfect job if u ask me

    safire
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]


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