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Despondency


Author: mrmundane
ASL Info:    20/m/vancouver bc
Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 47 /96 /78
Words: 178
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Despondency



I've been dragged into this hollow place
i can't recognize this world i face
whisper kiss touch alone
dwelling on experiences i've never known

i am the hermit in this shell limiter
castle defense at it's consentient perimeter
deflects every trespasser
friend or treacher

where self-reflection became self-destruction
full-blown self desecration
knit-picking at my own fault of being faulted
drowning in the fear of forever being unwanted

complacent abortment
throat stomach muscle contortment
awakening in self pity
addicted to unconformity

youth defected
lies expended
every girl i loved rejected
unkissed, unwanted

fervor long desponded
overshadowed haunted
every apple every eye
every time i want to die

without a pill
without a drink
be i long decayed i think

and all my years i've watched, alone
all of them fell for a desultory clone
whatever, i think, made me care
makes me wish it were never there

occasionally wishing i was someone different
an island desperately trying to drain it's sediment
of all this built up desecration
has left me breathless




Submitted on 2006-12-01 13:13:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Your poem is great, But there is only one problem i am a female(lol)
| Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by TeeTee | [ Reply to This ]


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