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Small Town Girl


Author: poetic_tragedy
ASL Info:    16/f/USA
Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 39 /55 /30
Words: 323
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
Total Views: 1245
Average Vote:    5.0000
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Description:


i wrote this for all of those who are suffering abuse in silence to encourage you to speak out or just to realize how truly bad your situation is. if you are getting abused, please speak to someone you trust and get the help you need.


Small Town Girl



Small town girl
Nobody knows
She covers up with baggy clothes

She's the one hiding behind a brick wall
She's the one they laugh about at the mall

If you could step into her shoes and walk for a mile
You'd know why she refuses to smile

Under her sweatshirt
Her arms riddled with bruises
The cuts on her wrist
They aren't what she chooses

If you could break through her tough outer shell
You'd see her heart, her private hell
You'd see her dreams, her hopes, her goals
You'd see her bruised and battered soul

Small town girl
Nobody knows
She suffers in silence beneath her black clothes

She goes it alone because no one is there
She cries on her own because no one will care

When she hears his car pulling up the drive
She runs to hide but he picks her out
He breaks her down, ever so slowly
Picturing her as the failure he himself has become

Her bruises grow darker
Her blood starts to pour
He leaves her there
Behind the closed door

She wishes he would stop
That he's cut himself instead
The scars he leaves her with
Makes her wish she was dead

Small town girl
Nobody knows
She cries out loud her forgotten woes

When he leaves she cries out for salvation
Hoping to God someone will hear
She knows she's alone in this cruel little world
She screams when she see's her face in the mirror

She wants to be smart
She wants to be pretty
She wants to be accepted without their pity

When people see her bruised, bloody face
She wants them to love her, not her disgrace
He's destroyed her esteem, her love he's forgotten
If only he knew the scars she has gotten

Small town girl
Nobody knows
She covers up with baggy clothes




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  wow this is definetly good and going on my top fav your so a good writer i see all your poetry and its just marvelous i applaud you.
| Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Dominic_poet | [ Reply to This ]
  very nice flow , u have got talent cant wait to c more of your writing
| Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by Kasper187 | [ Reply to This ]
  i love this
totally going on my favorite
id love to hear more of your poem
you sound very welly writer
| Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by gloomyanddoomy | [ Reply to This ]
  This made me tear up and cry, and I'm in the middle of our small town's high school computer lab. Marvelous beat and rhythm. I applaud.
| Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by DamageAddict | [ Reply to This ]
  absolutely perfect... its going on my favorites...
Katana
| Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
  "When she hears his car pulling up the drive
She runs to hide but he picks her out
He breaks her down, ever so slowly
Picturing her as the failure he himself has become"

I have a problem with this stanza. Every other stanza has at least one rhyme in it. Except this one. Although this is a moving write, and beautifully written. It is just that one part that makes my eye twitch.
| Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by Karios | [ Reply to This ]


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