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    dots Submission Name: Small Town Girldots
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    Author: poetic_tragedy
    ASL Info:    16/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 39/55/30
    Words: 323
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1087
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2123



    Description:
       i wrote this for all of those who are suffering abuse in silence to encourage you to speak out or just to realize how truly bad your situation is. if you are getting abused, please speak to someone you trust and get the help you need.


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    dotsSmall Town Girldots
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    Small town girl
    Nobody knows
    She covers up with baggy clothes

    She's the one hiding behind a brick wall
    She's the one they laugh about at the mall

    If you could step into her shoes and walk for a mile
    You'd know why she refuses to smile

    Under her sweatshirt
    Her arms riddled with bruises
    The cuts on her wrist
    They aren't what she chooses

    If you could break through her tough outer shell
    You'd see her heart, her private hell
    You'd see her dreams, her hopes, her goals
    You'd see her bruised and battered soul

    Small town girl
    Nobody knows
    She suffers in silence beneath her black clothes

    She goes it alone because no one is there
    She cries on her own because no one will care

    When she hears his car pulling up the drive
    She runs to hide but he picks her out
    He breaks her down, ever so slowly
    Picturing her as the failure he himself has become

    Her bruises grow darker
    Her blood starts to pour
    He leaves her there
    Behind the closed door

    She wishes he would stop
    That he's cut himself instead
    The scars he leaves her with
    Makes her wish she was dead

    Small town girl
    Nobody knows
    She cries out loud her forgotten woes

    When he leaves she cries out for salvation
    Hoping to God someone will hear
    She knows she's alone in this cruel little world
    She screams when she see's her face in the mirror

    She wants to be smart
    She wants to be pretty
    She wants to be accepted without their pity

    When people see her bruised, bloody face
    She wants them to love her, not her disgrace
    He's destroyed her esteem, her love he's forgotten
    If only he knew the scars she has gotten

    Small town girl
    Nobody knows
    She covers up with baggy clothes




    Submitted on 2006-12-01 14:03:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow this is definetly good and going on my top fav your so a good writer i see all your poetry and its just marvelous i applaud you.
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Dominic_poet | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice flow , u have got talent cant wait to c more of your writing
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by Kasper187 | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this
    totally going on my favorite
    id love to hear more of your poem
    you sound very welly writer
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by gloomyanddoomy | [ Reply to This ]
      This made me tear up and cry, and I'm in the middle of our small town's high school computer lab. Marvelous beat and rhythm. I applaud.
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by DamageAddict | [ Reply to This ]
      absolutely perfect... its going on my favorites...
    Katana
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
      "When she hears his car pulling up the drive
    She runs to hide but he picks her out
    He breaks her down, ever so slowly
    Picturing her as the failure he himself has become"

    I have a problem with this stanza. Every other stanza has at least one rhyme in it. Except this one. Although this is a moving write, and beautifully written. It is just that one part that makes my eye twitch.
    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by Karios | [ Reply to This ]


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