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    dots Submission Name: my hell, pt 2dots
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    Author: blu_kittin
    ASL Info:    18/F/The Emerald City
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 687/384/203
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Story/Trapped
    Total Views: 83
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    dotsmy hell, pt 2dots
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    Suddenly I was chained to the floor, staring up into nothingness with deep shadows moving all around me. Sharp, jagged bones pressed onto my flesh and decaying bodies pressed against my bare skin. Rats and maggots crawled over me, carressing my body in a sweep of slime and scurrying claws.
    I screamed wordlessly, a steady torrent of husy sound that filled the night with an earbursting echo. I screamed untill my throat was raw and sound ceased to escape. Tears ran down my face, soundless sobs shaking my body and pulling against my shackles. A rat shuffled up my body from my stomach to lick the salty tears off my cheek. I tried to scream again, but it caught in my throat and I choked on more tears.
    Death bent over me, a seductive smile playing at her lips. She made a soft clucking noise and a mischevious grin crept across her angelic features.
    "Save your voice, dear. You'll want it later when you're begging for release." Her fingers shimmered in the air above my face and I was calm.




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