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Hell's Fire

Author: precious_poetry
ASL Info:    19 F TN
Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137 /145 /67
Words: 119
Class/Type: Poetry /Betrayal
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Self Explanitory, hope its all right to read though lol. Let me know what you think.

Hell's Fire

Dripping from your cracked grin,
Deep crimson blood, showing defeat.
Lifeless, unmoving, decaying from within,
I stand proud to see you dead at my feet.

One less being to consider a friend,
Just to be betrayed and forgotten.
Our relationship gone, a deadly end,
Soured, soiled, and forever rotten.

I close your eyes, as you seem to stare,
Deep into my soul, peircing my thoughts,
I know now that you never did care,
And my love isn't what you sought.

I was a one time adventure, no more.
Left behind after you got what you desired.
I made sure to let you know, I am no whore.
And you'll remember as you burn in Hell's fires.

Submitted on 2006-12-01 18:14:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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