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    dots Submission Name: Hell's Firedots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 620
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 768



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       Self Explanitory, hope its all right to read though lol. Let me know what you think.


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    dotsHell's Firedots
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    Dripping from your cracked grin,
    Deep crimson blood, showing defeat.
    Lifeless, unmoving, decaying from within,
    I stand proud to see you dead at my feet.

    One less being to consider a friend,
    Just to be betrayed and forgotten.
    Our relationship gone, a deadly end,
    Soured, soiled, and forever rotten.

    I close your eyes, as you seem to stare,
    Deep into my soul, peircing my thoughts,
    I know now that you never did care,
    And my love isn't what you sought.

    I was a one time adventure, no more.
    Left behind after you got what you desired.
    I made sure to let you know, I am no whore.
    And you'll remember as you burn in Hell's fires.




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