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    dots Submission Name: afraiddots
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    Author: TheBlackFairy
    ASL Info:    18/female/Caldwell
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 32/29/15
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Living forever within a world of hope,
    decisions, and love.
    She’s lost herself,

    Wearing a mask of optimistic dreams
    her screams become a whisper among the roar of a crowd.
    She is empty

    of all the lies she tells herself.
    Imagination is finally running out
    to be replaced by more sadness.

    The memories of what once was keep her from crying.
    The words of those she has saved
    help keep her lying in the hope that it will one day be enough.

    Yet she wishes for the one thing that she constantly fakes.
    And she yearns for the truth that her lies have helped make.
    Slowly she’s breaking

    Into a million pieces, her
    heart slowly crumbling into a fine dust
    Is held together with bits of string to keep her alive
    as the water of forgotten tears begin to drown the last bit of sanity she has left inside.

    She’s afraid to break free of her stupid mask of hopeless dreams.
    Afraid that no one will like the change from what they now see,
    Afraid no one will understand who she hopes she’ll be.

    She’s afraid that one day,
    She might end up like me…….




    Submitted on 2006-12-01 20:19:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this a lot it has a lot of feeling and truth behind it. Excellent work
    | Posted on 2006-12-07 00:00:00 | by FLHgg | [ Reply to This ]


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