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    dots Submission Name: The Enddots
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    Author: crazy_83
    ASL Info:    28/f/mo
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 27/29/18
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 908
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 422



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    dotsThe Enddots
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    Nows the end
    and here i'll be
    waiting for you
    to come to me

    The pain of
    a forgotten soul
    who only gave in
    and lost control

    so all will be taken
    and stole away
    only brought back
    on this fateful day

    it will haunt your heart
    till you say goodbye
    it will kill your soul
    till the day you die




    Submitted on 2006-12-01 20:26:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I dont want to hurt you,but its really short and could do with a bit of more rhyming words.
    there are rhymes but the poem is not giving a perfect idea of what you were thinking at the time you wrote the poem.



    well if you are not angry with me please check out my poems DEAD MANS WORD and STRIVE FOR MORE
    its more or less similar to yours.
    | Posted on 2007-05-15 00:00:00 | by SAMEER | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. That was really good. Your very good at writting. There's not much to say besides great.

    Amazing.
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by hiddenxhearts | [ Reply to This ]


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