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    dots Submission Name: One More Daydots

    Author: crazy_83
    ASL Info:    28/f/mo
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 27/29/18
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 689
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsOne More Daydots

    Eyes meeting, seeing another
    Touching me, wanting some other
    Caressing my body, killing my soul
    Lieing finally taking its toll
    Making me see and realize
    all the hating and things I despise
    are coming from you, you lie and cheat
    Leaving you would be a relief!

    But as I lay here and think of the past
    I say like glass... Maybe I'll stay one more day
    but tomorrow may be to late.

    Submitted on 2006-12-01 20:32:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the rhyming and the flow of this one. great job! keep on writing <3
    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by everafter | [ Reply to This ]
      Brings me to places I have wondered in.As I pass though this life.A lot of feeling and hurt can be felt in your words.Writting can be a great help to the ones of us that need a outet to release...
    What we feel...

    Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by Postillion | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it is good. It made me understand what was happening without being to straight forward. I really liked the last three lines.. "But as I lay here and think of the pass I say like glass... Maybe I'll stay one more day but tomorrow may be to late." It was a great descripition of wanting to go but giving in to waiting one more day.

    Great Job.
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by hiddenxhearts | [ Reply to This ]

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