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The Watcher

Author: Semper Fidelis
ASL Info:    22/Male/ouahu, Hawaii
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Words: 117
Class/Type: Rant /Serious
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This poem was written under the inspiration put into place by seeing life with open eyes.

The Watcher

I am the watcher.
Witnessing the collapse of Harmony,
Viewing the smoldering ashes of the infrastructure
known as society.
you scream as your once vibrant world crumbles into faint vibrations.
The solidity of life, turned to gelatin.
Hear my laughter? Maniacle and scheming-
as I watch the world fall that left me battered and bleeding.
Thats right label me.
Bar-code MY sense of security.
You mean nothing to me-
With your generic individuality-
You seek pop-culture life. I seek reality.
I am the Watcher-
Label me disease.
If being who I am is a plauge,
breath me in and die slowly.
I am disease-
But compared to the way you live-
I am release.

Submitted on 2004-05-30 22:00:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  oh, wow. i loved this poem, way better than mine!

I am the Watcher-
Label me disease.
If being who I am is a plauge,
breath me in and die slowly.
I am disease-
But compared to the way you live-
I am release.

my fave part...death to those who conform to society...very nice. I read the titles of some of your other pieces, they intrigue me...i must read more later, perhaps I will even come to stalk you, who knows? Read your sorta goin through that stage now...coming out of darkness for while, in search of something...oh well. You have real talent, cant wait to read more:)

| Posted on 2004-11-09 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]
  woo, this is got a bitter sweet taste of corey taylor. I love it. Society today is going to hell, it is gone down, and not one person is doing a thing to save it. Why do all these people kick back and watch, and do absolutely nothing?? My voice is never heard, my voice may never be heard, and I don't think even corey himself has gotten through to the majority of people, but if and when it does, where will we stand? You poem is awesome, and I am definantly feeling it.
| Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow! this write has a ton of emotion and feel i can really connect with it...its really good...its like your venting something that's been bottled up inside for a long time, to long...this write is made better because you don't give in and change, try to deny what you are, or kill yourself (as the people in my poems usually do) you stand up and say fine lable me i am what i am...the only suggestion i have is that maybe you could seperate it into stanzas so it seems to flow better and/or is easier to read...good work
| Posted on 2004-05-30 00:00:00 | by morte | [ Reply to This ]
  love it, love it, love it...I love political poetry and love the way this flows, my tongue found the natural rhythm in your head as I followed the word on the page, and my fave line was...
"That's right label me.
Bar-code MY sense of security..."
Because no matter how much of an individual you are everyone is unvoluntarily labeled from the gate and the only thing we can take pride in is that no bar-code is never the same, which is kind of a contradictive idea, but anyway...I loved it
| Posted on 2004-05-30 00:00:00 | by bluepifany | [ Reply to This ]
  This is so incredible! The bit about the barcode was great, and the whole repitition of 'i am the watcher' was amazing. It was as if you pulled these words out of your heart. Fantastic!
| Posted on 2004-05-30 00:00:00 | by Elegy | [ Reply to This ]

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