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    dots Submission Name: Happy Birthdaydots
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    Author: everafter
    Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 38/33/10
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
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    Description:
       This was derived from my actual sixteenth birthday... and yes, he did show up in my room with roses, more of which were strewn across my floor and my bed.


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    Excitement grabbed upon her chest
    At the early glimpse of dawn
    Sixteen sweet years into her life
    A picture so colorfully drawn

    "What is your wish?" she's often asked
    By her family and friends
    "To spend it with the ones I love,
    Together," was what she said

    Alas, it was not meant to be
    The celebration premature
    A blissful day turned bittersweet
    When he walked out the door

    One by one, her plans took off
    To roads she can't assume
    Surreptitious friends had led her home
    Beckoning to her room

    The door glowed yellow from within
    For a reason she can't surmise
    She slowly opened her bedroom door
    Gasping in surprise

    Petals were strewn across the floor
    Air thick of roses' scent
    A record spinned melancholic tunes
    With lyrics truly meant

    "Happy birthday", he whispered soft
    Love in his ocean eyes
    Into his tender arms, she fell
    Her sweet birthday surprise




    Submitted on 2006-12-02 05:34:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is so cute! haha i wish that everything that went wrong on times like these had a "turn-around" and something that makes you say you lived happily ever after.
    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]
      All I can say is "Wow"! This is a great story and a great poem!
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful, really beautiful. That's gotta have been the best birthday ever !!! Your writing is really amazing, it is structured and flows wonderfully. can't wait to read more of your stuff. xx

    ~lou~
    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
      Your words flowed together really good. I liked it alot!
    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by crazy_83 | [ Reply to This ]



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