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    dots Submission Name: Pretty Chain of Heroinedots
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    Author: Mr. Creep
    ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
    Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96/177/112
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPretty Chain of Heroinedots
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    Little boy blue
    on the edge of a syringe
    one more step to overdose
    no one to stop him, no escape

    Little boy two
    saw his brother on the floor
    from the sore reminder of that day
    the needle was this ticket to freedom

    Young sister new
    had no intention for the abuse
    her mother pushed her hard to succed
    now in the hospital she lay craveing.

    Did'nt know what to do
    mom gave it all away for school
    now with nothing left she took it up
    on the cold streets she fades

    Decided not to sue
    dad was rich and free
    but with that money he bought a whore
    with a full package of heroin.




    Submitted on 2006-12-02 09:46:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow. i like this. alot. drug usage is not good. i know a kid that went to my school who died from it. it can influence everyone around that one person. the school is full of drug addicts now. great job.

    ~!rocker5871!~
    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]


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