Pretty Chain of Heroine

Author: Mr. Creep ASL Info:    16. Female. Here Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96 /177 /112 Words: 120

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Pretty Chain of Heroine

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Little boy blue on the edge of a syringe one more step to overdose no one to stop him, no escape Little boy two saw his brother on the floor from the sore reminder of that day the needle was this ticket to freedom Young sister new had no intention for the abuse her mother pushed her hard to succed now in the hospital she lay craveing. Did'nt know what to do mom gave it all away for school now with nothing left she took it up on the cold streets she fades Decided not to sue dad was rich and free but with that money he bought a whore with a full package of heroin.

Submitted on 2006-12-02 09:46:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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wow. i like this. alot. drug usage is not good. i know a kid that went to my school who died from it. it can influence everyone around that one person. the school is full of drug addicts now. great job. ~!rocker5871!~

| Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]

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