Pretty Chain of Heroine by Mr. Creep

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Submission Name: Pretty Chain of Heroine dots

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Author:	Mr. Creep
ASL Info:	16. Female. Here
Elite Ratio:	1.97 - 96/177/112
Words:	120

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	1038
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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Pretty Chain of Heroine dots

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Little boy blue
on the edge of a syringe
one more step to overdose
no one to stop him, no escape

Little boy two
saw his brother on the floor
from the sore reminder of that day
the needle was this ticket to freedom

Young sister new
had no intention for the abuse
her mother pushed her hard to succed
now in the hospital she lay craveing.

Did'nt know what to do
mom gave it all away for school
now with nothing left she took it up
on the cold streets she fades

Decided not to sue
dad was rich and free
but with that money he bought a whore
with a full package of heroin.

Submitted on 2006-12-02 09:46:09 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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wow. i like this. alot. drug usage is not good. i know a kid that went to my school who died from it. it can influence everyone around that one person. the school is full of drug addicts now. great job.

~!rocker5871!~
| Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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