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Submission Name: again dots

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Author:	painfullyme
ASL Info:	23/F/MA
Elite Ratio:	2.86 - 335/456/72
Words:	157

Class/Type:	Lyrics/Depressed
Total Views:	387
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Bytes:	1045

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i've been fucking up all day long and this just poured out.

again

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i fucked it up again
tried so hard, but in the end
failure in everything i do
reminiscent of my time with you

thought this time
it would all work out
never imagined
things could go this wrong
wonder how i
could let this be
don't know why
i just went along

i fucked it up again
tried so hard, but in the end
failure in everything i do
reminiscent of my time with you

patience turned
this love to hate
living changed
this dream to pain
longing has made
this tortured soul
so afraid to
trust again

i fucked it up again
tried so hard, but in the end
failure in everything i do
reminiscent of my time with you

i fucked it up again
which has led to my tragic end
failure in everything i do
reminiscent of my love for you

reminiscent
of my love
for you
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||| Comments |||
  nice. been there done that just recently. I see the angst in your thoughts about the breakup and its like looking into the mirror. Keep the f word f*** it.
| Posted on 2004-08-10 00:00:00 | by leedpickle | [ Reply to This ]
  I like how you repeat this line...

i [censored]ed it up again
tried so hard, but in the end
failure in everything i do
reminiscent of my time with you

Very nice write! I love it!
| Posted on 2004-08-10 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]
  looks like you've definately taken your writing in a different direction since i've been away. i really like it lol. i'll be commenting more. and i'm gonna try to post every now and then. see ya. again nice work.
| Posted on 2004-08-28 00:00:00 | by Butterfly Bullets | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow. Wow. There are no words...but seriously, with such talent you can't think of a way to say "[censored]ed up again" without actually saying it? I just hate swearing in poetry, and this is just. just so amazing. dont know what to say.....maybe change the cursing?

-Bruno
| Posted on 2004-05-30 00:00:00 | by brunov68 | [ Reply to This ]
  These are really great lyrics i can just hear the music that would go with them in my head...i think that the lyrics are made better with the swearing...it shows more emotions more anger and pain...very good write!
| Posted on 2004-05-30 00:00:00 | by morte | [ Reply to This ]
  okay the F'ed up seems to be a prob...I would suggest you pinpoint yopur audience...If want for main stream use 'Screwed up" instead...more socially acceptable without the shock value.
otherwise I thought it was really good.
jan
| Posted on 2004-05-30 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a geat write! It sounds like how i feel at least 4 times a week so it really hits home. It just wouldn't be the same without the swearing so i say don't change that at all. Keep up the great work!
| Posted on 2004-05-30 00:00:00 | by Linz | [ Reply to This ]
  no way! keep the F's. they add intensity and show how you really feel. after a long day of F*ing up, i'm sure u'd use those words. i like the 2nd verse best, "living changed this dream to pain."
| Posted on 2004-05-30 00:00:00 | by smlltwnScape | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, whatever about the f word. I won't use it, but...whatever. Can anyone think of a comment that doesn't have anything to do with swearing?
"failure in everything i do
reminiscent of my time with you"
That's pretty great. It just is so true of a failed relationship, dissing, but in a quiet, sort fo accepting way. Good stuff.

~ Niphredil
| Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by Niphredil | [ Reply to This ]
  Thats almost exactly what I thought about myself after my love broke up with me. It hurts. You did a great job of expressing your feeling and this had passion. But I thought there should be more to it. Anywho, good write.
| Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by Broken heart dies | [ Reply to This ]

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