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    dots Submission Name: ** Conversation of Wished **dots
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    Author: vitoko
    ASL Info:    24/M
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 690/442/104
    Words: 844
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 764
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    Bytes: 4974



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       well it was a conversation between Jess and i i love you punkippie, cuz you are one of the greatest writers i have met thanks to you


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    dots** Conversation of Wished **dots
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    V: i didnt see your smile while i was hoping your words, i wish i had seen your heart before i am gone
    J: I walked away, expecting you to come after me, why did you let me go?
    V: because i got freezed and your hugs didnt catch me
    J:tears ran down my face- but I guess you'd never see them, an ice cold rain falls upon trembling hands
    V:your hands which i could could touch right now.. caressing your soft face as heaven falls
    J:heaven that burns as if laced with poison, your touch feels so empty; had you forgot already?
    V:i havent forgotten anything cuz your words are still here in my heart and your kisses are still kissing my soul
    J:those days in your arms seem so far away ,and I'm not safe anymore, screaming inside yet no sound is heard...
    V:not even my voice, which is whispering "i Still got blues for you"
    J:in the dark I remember what it feels like with you beside me, silently singing "I told myself I won't miss you"
    V:why not missing me ? just because i was the love or ur life or the hatred by you
    J:hated? I couldn't hate someone I never loved; yet i Love you still....as I'm here alone
    V:still loving your smile, still loving your words, still loving your hair,
    V:your hair that makes me go to heaven
    J:in every happy thought I ever had, your smile was there, your hands touching mine, you were my savior
    V:and now i am stuck in the hell of losers without your sight ....
    J:in the shadows I call your name, were you thinking of me too? here I bleed all for you....like it always was...
    V:bleeding ?? i do not want you to bleed... i want you to breathe my love
    J:but to breathe without you would hurt far worse than blood spilling
    V:so I may fly to you side and sing an "i love you" song
    J:but you let me walk away; I can't belong with you anymore, I've no more tears to cry
    V:and i have no more words to say how i loved and love your way
    J:so what am I to do? without you life is nothing, and with you I can no longer be
    V:so, we should die to go to the place where we belong ...
    J:die to be together? or live apart? which flame burns deepest?
    V:the flame of love after death, the deepest feeling that souls feel
    J:a dark flame that feeds into a love not meant for this earth
    V:this was born by our souls
    V:so in the universe of love, we are two worlds give love to the stars
    J:that shine endlessly in your eyes, mystifying and unexplained
    V:which the science of this planet wants to know...
    V:but never felt
    J:but science and art....like beauty and fact don't need to mix
    V:the art??
    V:art of your skin touching my face...
    V:as the sun gives her last sunlight
    J:and gentle wind sweeps across fading scars
    V:scars that came from your goodbye
    J:and the false promise of another hello; faking a smile just to stop from crying
    V:in a time when hello meant goodbye and goodbye means i am still loving u
    J:"and in my heart I can't contain, the anthem won't explain it" my love for you rests in poetic words; and a broken, beating heart
    V:why explaining the love you feel?
    V:why resting when it could fly in the air
    J:broken wings no longer find flight; and must somehow learn to walk
    V:walking??? that is what humans do ...
    V:but we are more than boy and girl walking in hands...
    J:yet held down by human emotions.....walking seems to fit
    V:stop emotions and start to feel what you never wanted "love"
    J:"juliet's crying, cause now she's realizing love can be filled with pain and distrust"
    V:pain and distrust?, have i given you those ?
    J:hasn't everyone?
    V:so do they mean what i give you ?
    V:do they feel for you what i love to give you ?
    J:they could never explain what they feel
    J:deep confusion meets blinding pain....and the past isn't easy to forget
    V:why forgetting the pain when the love we shared was more than that pain?
    J:but the pain mixes in, taints the final image. like a black stain on pure white wings
    V:so you cant fly anymnore.. and you prefer staying here in the world of pain and tears..
    V:instead of going with me to the land of roses
    J:happiness is nothing if you never felt pain, my heart could fly but it'd just return again
    V:return where you belong and where i fell in love with you and ur words..
    J:I can't return to a place that welcomes me but...is no longer home.
    V:so where is your home? the sweet house in miami beach or between stars which dances?
    J:my home is in your arms, where you saved me so many times before, but you left too....




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      Ode to an older member of ES This particular piece I have to give you credit for it because this would have been complicated to do and pull it off. Was this like an in depth version of a Conversation? I respect to say the least. Sad how people know where they need to be but can't be there because of past trials.

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    | Posted on 2007-08-29 00:00:00 | by Dutchess_aira | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't say I really enjoyed this as much as ron did. It felt a bit too forced, however I feel that a love poem written from two perspectives is a really cool idea. Sadly, I didn't see this very much as two perspectives, rather just two people talking to eachother in a dark way, using alot of metaphors. If you ever make a multi perspective piece, I think that would be really cool, on love or on anything.
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
      Great Job Guys
    This write is very Hypnotizing in the fact it reads like a beautiful Love song and Leaves the Reader hoping beyond Hope that True Love can show its beautiful face and rescue to souls whose Hearts beat as one
    You guys really did Great with this
    I have recently got a lot of requests from People to write a Joint write
    I feel more then ever now that I will accept these peoples Propositions
    Excellent Job
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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