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**After the Storm

Author: Caotic_Disaster
ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
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Words: 137
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Umm...just a little sometihng I typed up because I was bored, and it was raining. Enjoy..I hope.

**After the Storm

The clouds move in
Ready for an attack
Like bomber planes
Ready to end life.
But rather, to start it
For after the shower,
The flowers will reach higher,
And the rabbits will hop
Out from hiding
Blinking into the light.
Little ones will play
With balls bouncing down the street,
Dogs will run through the grass.
And all the while
The sun will graze along,
And stop to warm the ground
Like a thick blanket
Warming a small child.
The wind will whisper
Nuzzling through the grass
As a gentle horse
Looks for a carrot.
But until then
The world waits inside
Listening to the tiny bullets
Waging war on land.

Submitted on 2006-12-02 13:48:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was a good poem, described well, the lovliness of nature after a shower and how one longs for the storm to be done so that one can go out !
| Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
  I think it does a good job holidng imagery the idea of war being fought against the land rather then agaisnt each other is not new, but is still fresh, shows creative influence, and a good poetic skill to take something that is not your own and make it so it is.

Good job.
| Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by obsidiandreams | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really thought provoking: the juxtapositioning of the notion of bombers and bombs with that jolly experience of the rabbit bounding along is very powerful. The use of Nature is a splendid counterbalance to the threat you are posing here. A special read, thank you.

| Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by siradrian | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really beautiful
I Love the Rain and know the Rain is the One thing that is extrelely important in carrying Life forward
The rain supplies Life and replenishes us so we can move forward in life
I believe also the rain carries away all Negativity stored in our soul and creates a new spot in our soul for Happiness and Positive Energy to latch on too
Excellent Job!!!
I always enjoy reading new writes from 2 of my favorite poets
Shelby and Shannon
God Bless
Please keep in touch!!!
| Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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