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    dots Submission Name: **After the Stormdots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Umm...just a little sometihng I typed up because I was bored, and it was raining. Enjoy..I hope.

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    dots**After the Stormdots

    The clouds move in
    Ready for an attack
    Like bomber planes
    Ready to end life.
    But rather, to start it
    For after the shower,
    The flowers will reach higher,
    And the rabbits will hop
    Out from hiding
    Blinking into the light.
    Little ones will play
    With balls bouncing down the street,
    Dogs will run through the grass.
    And all the while
    The sun will graze along,
    And stop to warm the ground
    Like a thick blanket
    Warming a small child.
    The wind will whisper
    Nuzzling through the grass
    As a gentle horse
    Looks for a carrot.
    But until then
    The world waits inside
    Listening to the tiny bullets
    Waging war on land.

    Submitted on 2006-12-02 13:48:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a good poem, Shannon.....you described well, the lovliness of nature after a shower and how one longs for the storm to be done so that one can go out !
    | Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it does a good job holidng imagery the idea of war being fought against the land rather then agaisnt each other is not new, but is still fresh, shows creative influence, and a good poetic skill to take something that is not your own and make it so it is.

    Good job.
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by obsidiandreams | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really thought provoking: the juxtapositioning of the notion of bombers and bombs with that jolly experience of the rabbit bounding along is very powerful. The use of Nature is a splendid counterbalance to the threat you are posing here. A special read, thank you.

    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by siradrian | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really beautiful
    I Love the Rain and know the Rain is the One thing that is extrelely important in carrying Life forward
    The rain supplies Life and replenishes us so we can move forward in life
    I believe also the rain carries away all Negativity stored in our soul and creates a new spot in our soul for Happiness and Positive Energy to latch on too
    Excellent Job!!!
    I always enjoy reading new writes from 2 of my favorite poets
    Shelby and Shannon
    God Bless
    Please keep in touch!!!
    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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