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    dots Submission Name: Pastdots
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    Author: EsCaPisT
    ASL Info:    17,Female,Singapore
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 42/38/38
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 682
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    dotsPastdots
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    When a shattered past clings on to you again
    Seeping beneath your skin,
    And filling your heart with shackles,
    Cease the struggle to break free.

    Reflect the pain, and its worth to our life.
    If it devastates you, push it out of the door of your heart.
    Lock the door and throw the key to the sea.
    If it enlightens you, spread the worth to those who needs you most.

    Most may say ''Let bygones be bygones.''
    Touche, but there are instances
    When the past is what you need before you blossom.
    Look back to your mistakes, before you move on to be a better person.
    Then savour the present,
    To work for the future.




    Submitted on 2006-12-02 18:43:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ah it has stanzas I was expecting a rhyme!
    No bother, no bother, free verse is perfectly respectable.
    The past has always been seen as a "hanger-on" of sorts, to be thrown or cast away and not spoken of, your last stanza throws that into the rubbish dump where it belongs, just more elegantly, me like.
    One issue I have with this..why say the past needs to be free when it is "filling your heart with shackles"?
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. this is really nice. keep writing. if you added more onto it, it would shine so much brighter.

    ~!rocker5871!~
    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]


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