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    Author: iKnowWhoIAmNow
    ASL Info:    18/f/ghetto paradise
    Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 79/36/17
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 673
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    Description:
       This is a follow up poem to "It is I Your Best Friend Mia", I wrote it 10 months after I wrote Mia...it's how I fought off the lie.


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    Together we will fight the fight
    You and me throughout the night
    Hold my hand
    I understand
    I listen when you cry
    Lay by me, I care for thee
    That was Satan's lie

    You lied to me you deceiver
    You chose to send me Mia
    'Cause you knew that I would receive her
    You are a manipulative mastermind
    A wolf in sheep's clothing
    My Lord you tried to hide
    And to eternal death betroth this bride

    You sent yourself as my death envoy
    The Word sure did not lie
    When it said you came
    To steal, kill, and destroy
    A testimony of that am I

    I thank the Lord now every day
    For loving me despite my imperfection
    And for answering the continual cry
    Of my family's intecession

    My heavenly Father has given me
    Something better than my own ideal
    Now I do not have to rely on myself
    Because His love for me
    Despite my imperfection, is real

    Life for me is no longer a hopeless chase
    But a continual race
    Not to be run alone by myself
    But with God as my help

    I do not need that false security
    My peace, love, and joy await me
    Unlocked by God himself
    The door to my life swings wide open every day
    But only because I give Him the key
    Every time I pray




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      lovely piece..."the door to my life swings wide open everyday.. but only because I gave him the key everytime I pray"..
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by POETIC-PRINCESS | [ Reply to This ]
      Truely awsome! I feel I can really relate to your poems. I love the emotion. Another great, great write.
    Thanks for the wonderful read,
    -Jenny
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by Darklonelygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      oh my gosh i love this. not many people have the courage to write about God in this way. it's a shame we don't show him more praise. i think you did extremely well on this write, except you said "despite my imperfection" twice. i don't know, maybe you could've changed one of them, unless you intentionally made it repetitious. but yeah great work...keep it up and i'll keep reading. going on my favorites**
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      Another amazing piece. Again, with great structure nad emotion. This flows beautifully and has a deep powerfull message. Well done, can't wait to read more of your work. xx

    ~lou~
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]


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