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Author: bbllaarr2
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this is a poem about my ex girl friend breaking my heart



If you had no one left. Would you turn back to me?
Admit to me that you broke us?
I loved you with every bit of my broken heart.
You Broke My Heart
You Killed My Soul

Why do I suffer for being true to you?
All I ever did was love you all I could.
What went wrong
You Broke My Heart
You Killed My Soul

Pain is Love, Love is Pain, The hurt that I feel can never leave me
you meant the world to me, why couldn't I, to you?
How could I have been so dumb and blind?
You Broke My Heart
You Killed My Soul

I see now that I meant nothing to you.
Only a temporary body next to yours
and when someone better appeared within reach.
You left.
These tears I cry, I cry for you
You Broke My Heart
You Killed my Soul

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