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    dots Submission Name: EmPtYdots
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    Author: bbllaarr2
    Elite Ratio:    0.01 - 0/1/3
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    Description:
       this is a poem about my ex girl friend breaking my heart


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    dotsEmPtYdots
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    Empty

    If you had no one left. Would you turn back to me?
    Admit to me that you broke us?
    I loved you with every bit of my broken heart.
    You Broke My Heart
    You Killed My Soul

    Why do I suffer for being true to you?
    All I ever did was love you all I could.
    What went wrong
    You Broke My Heart
    You Killed My Soul

    Pain is Love, Love is Pain, The hurt that I feel can never leave me
    you meant the world to me, why couldn't I, to you?
    How could I have been so dumb and blind?
    You Broke My Heart
    You Killed My Soul

    I see now that I meant nothing to you.
    Only a temporary body next to yours
    and when someone better appeared within reach.
    You left.
    These tears I cry, I cry for you
    You Broke My Heart
    You Killed my Soul




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