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    Author: allbymylonesome
    Elite Ratio:    1.83 - 4/8/6
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       yesterday my friend watched his friend slit her wrists on webcam, and now im depressed... this isnt my best work, but i dont feel like improving it


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    the blood runnning down the sink
    water from the tap
    they dont mix
    together a design is made
    of spirals and blossoming lines
    and as i feel my mind leaving
    i wonder
    at that beauty




    Submitted on 2006-12-03 06:20:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I SO MUCH LIKE IT~BUT IT MADE ME FEEL~
    sad~wanting~craving~more life

    | Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by ms.v | [ Reply to This ]
      So sad to read your description. Take care, Peggy
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]


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