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    dots Submission Name: Temptation of the odddots
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    Author: Non-Sens-Uality
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 67/80/53
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       My muse dreaming...


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    dotsTemptation of the odddots
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    ... that winter night faded to glitter,
    The snowflakes white, times sweet, times bitter...
    On my empty, frozen eye.

    I tried to sleep - ignore, deny...
    A tear I sought, but could not cry,
    For I'm eternity's dear flitter...

    ...and still I fell, in deep blue oceans
    where up and down are just mere notions
    And where the coldness lies.

    I tought I could be touching skies
    But clouds, like truth, are only lies.
    Beware of void emotions...

    ...and nothing is so real like pain
    when your heart bleeds, your mind insane,
    Your words loose every meaning.

    And this end is not a beginning
    Open your eyes, and please stop dreaming
    It is only a game...




    Submitted on 2006-12-03 09:25:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It diffently has a mystical feel to it, with amazing imagery. You have a talent for blending your words
    and making them flow so smoothly. I enjoyed it a lot.
    I some weird way: I could relate to it on a higher level.
    love and peace,
    lynn
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
      Extraordinary! THis is such a favourite that there should be a special category for it. I don't know where to begin or what to say. It so ethereal, translucent...gorgeous and mistique. Masterpiece crafted like the mist of spyderwebs.
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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