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    dots Submission Name: Spelled in the Sunspotsdots
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    Author: giventofly
    ASL Info:    19/M/Seattle, Washington
    Elite Ratio:    5.22 - 74/75/27
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 823
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    Description:
       This poem is meant to detail the frustration that life holds for some. It's for a friend of mine who seems to have just been dealt a bad hand in life. Dispite all the pain he's had from learning everything the hard way, he still thinks always of others first and hasn't been conquered by his less than desirable luck.


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    dotsSpelled in the Sunspotsdots
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    Filled is his life,
    fervent and cold and
    driven by the past’s hateful dice,
    with the one fluid note
    that is grief.

    Tasting the bitter sick
    that rides
    on betrayals unfurled,
    he aches in his empathy.
    He loves and gives
    and feels for the birds
    all while his friend, the eagle,
    pecks at his liver.

    To learn and live
    for the cause of another…
    That is the creed
    of a heartening despair.
    But from counterfeit heights,
    false judgment rains down hard
    and burns and opens the scars.

    …and even when the clouds of liars
    have finally bled dry
    to reveal the answer so rare,
    so spelled in the sunspots,
    cruelly and coy and
    backlit by that blinding eye…
    Through space and miles they laugh.

    …but the warmth felt alright.




    Submitted on 2006-12-03 13:09:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That was, I don't know what else to say but wow. The phrase "that was wow," sounds stupid though and I don't like sounding stupid. I like all of the allusion in this, like in stanza two the allusion to Prometheus. The imagry is strong and beautiful. I thought that this was beautiful and strong and gave the since of strength that you say your friend has. It is wonderful and honest and I wish to be thought of by someone in the light that you think of your friend.
    Briannan
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by Briannan | [ Reply to This ]


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