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    dots Submission Name: Stretcheddots
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    Author: austin
    ASL Info:    22/ Male/ Odessa, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 376/396/84
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angst
    Total Views: 1028
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       More of a motivational piece for me, no compromises, pedal to the floor, even if you fall, grab life by the balls and rip em out. I've got a big problem with apathetic people, and this is saying don't fall to the vices that are out there to consume us.


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    Rotting, the word seems familiar
    nothing is getting any clearer
    lost the sense of time, the when and the how
    stretched as far as my mind allows

    far above the anchors of within
    the rough waters know no ceasing
    the chain must hold strong now
    to keep us from all going down

    the time has come for all to rise
    these indictions will fall in time
    Fuck this lost sense of ourselves
    from the oceans and into hell

    Reclaim, what your apathy stole
    bore it out, then make it whole
    fall from the outside, then stand up
    get back to where you came from

    Reclaim and rise
    Reclaim and rise
    no fucking need for compromise




    Submitted on 2006-12-03 16:18:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i can totally hear this as a great song, if you got some a band together and played this it would be a hit...
    my favorite verse is :

    "the time has come for all to rise
    these indictions will fall in time
    [censored] this lost sense of ourselves
    from the oceans and into hell"

    i really like this
    i am sometimes apathertic, but only when confuzed and torn up inside..most of the time sad or mad..with the occasional happy moments inbetween....

    this is very awesome write, i love it, hope you dont mind if i add to my favs..its great!! :)

    Bella
    | Posted on 2007-09-25 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      Dang Straight!! "Reclaim and rise"....That's f-ckin awesome Brent.
    Life screws with us so why not screw it right back with being who and what we want to be?!! :) I like the comparisons you used in this. "anchors of within" and "rough waters" are accurate visuals of life in general.
    I loved it!
    Live it up! :)
    Great piece.
    Take care,
    beth
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this motivational grab life by the balls side of you. I could definently sense the rise in feelings, and by the end of this I could see you, having just jammed your heart out, soaking in sweat and just standing there, coming out of everything on top and yourself. no compromise. That's good. Makes me want to stand up and do something... but what I haven't got a clue. Very nice write though, I enjoyed the ride.

    -steph
    | Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by playcrackthesky | [ Reply to This ]


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