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    dots Submission Name: You're So Blinddots
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    Author: rocker5871
    Elite Ratio:    1.37 - 191/147/90
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsYou're So Blinddots
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    Do you think my words are empty?
    Do you think that I don’t care?
    If I didn’t, do you think I’d still be here
    Getting swept up in this complicated affair?

    I stayed by your side,
    But I was denied.

    You’re so blinded by her charade.
    You’re stuck in a lover’s masquerade.

    She can’t talk with you like me
    She doesn’t love you like I do
    In less than two weeks,
    You’ll be through

    I know your very essence
    From birth to adolescence

    One day you’ll know,
    And I won’t have to wait.
    You’ll understand.
    Just have to make a rain date.

    So now I sit here,
    Strumming my guitar,
    Singing a slow song,
    Wondering where you are.




    Submitted on 2006-12-03 17:14:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      yeah, it would be a great song. ive kinda felt this way before so i can relate to this poem. i rele like it.
    | Posted on 2006-12-11 00:00:00 | by Anz | [ Reply to This ]
      nice write
    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by Kasper187 | [ Reply to This ]
      great write. i agree with iknowwhoiamnow...this could be a good song. i like the lines "You’re so blinded by her charade. You’re stuck in a lover’s masquerade."
    "I know your very essenceFrom birth to adolescence"
    you've got a way with words..keep it up.
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      Great! If you made the last stanza a chorus, this would make a great song!
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by iKnowWhoIAmNow | [ Reply to This ]



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