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    dots Submission Name: Youthdots
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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    24/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 617/549/200
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 218
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    Bytes: 1372



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    dotsYouthdots
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    I look at all the children
    attempting to forget what i see,
    it seems my faith is fading
    right along-side my beliefs;
    this world just gets worse
    with every new generation,
    we have nothing else to blame
    but our own procrastination!

    is there any hope
    for the youth to come?
    if we're this fuckin damned
    what's to become of them?
    is innocense extinct
    just a meaningless word?
    i can ask for forgiveness
    but to expect it's absurd

    i use to look at children
    and get a smile on my face,
    but now i see the youth
    feeling i must look away;
    i use to see hope...
    dreams and even happiness,
    a glimpse of what the future held
    now that holds no relevance!

    is there any hope
    for the youth to come?
    if we're this fucked up
    what's to become of them?
    an innocense extinct
    another meaningless word?
    i can cry for forgiveness
    and to expect it's absurd

    it's our fault...
    that this worlds fucked up!
    and it's our fault
    that the youth is damned!
    it's our fault...
    and you don't seem to care!
    so go fuck yourselves
    like we've fucked them!




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      good points in dis poem yo.

    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      oh my gosh, someone finally gets it! this nations youth is pretty screwed as of now. what happened to families that sat down and eat together at dinner time and kids coming home and doing their homework? now it's a slammed door in the parents face and the only thing children look forward to doing once they reach home is rolling another joint. ahh someone help them before rit's too late......
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      yea, the general consensus seems to be that you had enough emotion....as you always do. if I could write like that, well i'd have a few less things holding me back. I guess this is true enough, although I admit just seeing your title I had my doubts.....god knows we don't need to hear anymore old people [censored]ing endlessly about how [censored]ed up 'today's youth' is, and i guess you also bordered cliché here....the world's been [censored]ed for so long though, I can't even remember the first time i noticed....that makes me sad though the only kids that make me smile anymore for no real reason are like really really little babies...like Caden he's so cute. well....and Andrew but that's different, he doesn't count like that. (see I can make things work for me too, i just make up the rules as i go) nice write....if nothing else it reawoke a topic i'd overlooked for a few weeks.
    ~jess~
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      alot of emotion, and you are very passionate are you not. I find almost all (except [censored] ME) that I like, the world is going under, it's [censored]ed up, but this is great.

    Only one thing...you spelled innocecse wrong. It's INNOCENCE.
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]
      There's alot of emotion in this piece. I really like it. It sounds like you are passionate about what you believe here. I like that. It is sad the way this world is sinking, I agree. But I do see some people who have really screwed up making unexpected comebacks that change people's lives. It's not over till its over. Thanks for writing this piece. I really enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by iKnowWhoIAmNow | [ Reply to This ]


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