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Author:	Nagow
ASL Info:	20/f/Denmark
Elite Ratio:	2.56 - 56/70/29
Words:	83

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	1045
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	550

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This poem is for my big sister who's getting married. i wanna know what you think, and if you think I could give it to her.

I'm very open for suggestions

So comment away..

Thanks

To you

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Two flowers in a field
beautiful and smart
They are each other's shield
through everything that's hard

It might not be for the eyes to catch
so in love and free
but they are a perfect match
and will always be

They met and knew
that their lives should be shared
their infatution was true ( or is it were? )
nothing could be compared

And so they live on
happy together
these flowers are strong
and will be forever

Submitted on 2004-05-31 03:27:37 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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It's beautiful. Im sure your sis will love it. I like how you have used Flowers to explain the strong unity of two souls and the strong bond that marriage should provide. Nice work. Keep it up.
| Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by Broken | [ Reply to This ]
I too think that its a bit shallow and that you could go into more depth on the flowers concept. Other than that, I think that you're views are clearly shown and I'm sure that your sister will like it. The message is very uplifting, nice work!
| Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.