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    dots Submission Name: To youdots

    Author: Nagow
    ASL Info:    20/f/Denmark
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 56/70/29
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1045
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       This poem is for my big sister who's getting married. i wanna know what you think, and if you think I could give it to her.

    I'm very open for suggestions

    So comment away..


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    dotsTo youdots

    Two flowers in a field
    beautiful and smart
    They are each other's shield
    through everything that's hard

    It might not be for the eyes to catch
    so in love and free
    but they are a perfect match
    and will always be

    They met and knew
    that their lives should be shared
    their infatution was true ( or is it were? )
    nothing could be compared

    And so they live on
    happy together
    these flowers are strong
    and will be forever

    Submitted on 2004-05-31 03:27:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's beautiful. Im sure your sis will love it. I like how you have used Flowers to explain the strong unity of two souls and the strong bond that marriage should provide. Nice work. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by Broken | [ Reply to This ]
      I too think that its a bit shallow and that you could go into more depth on the flowers concept. Other than that, I think that you're views are clearly shown and I'm sure that your sister will like it. The message is very uplifting, nice work!
    | Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]

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