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    dots Submission Name: from happiness to deathdots

    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Rant/Love
    Total Views: 554
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1128

       as much as i love her, i wonder....does she love me?
    but in the end i don't care cuz I have her!
    this one isn't one that has even a small bit of ryming in it....sorry guys
    this is like my others that i haven't posted, when i post them then thou shall see my true nature of writing...till then, enjoy what i have

    a true description of this one....well, let me start from the top
    i only see my girl about...twice a day, at school and after work. but now i start working from 5-close leaving me to see her only once a day and i only see her at lunch(life hates me). whenever i see her, the first chance i get, i grab her hand. when i hold on to her hand all problems go away. the rest of this "rant" is pretty much self explanitory.

    if ya'll didn't like this one, then i understand if you bash on it.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsfrom happiness to deathdots

    i hardly see her
    and work isnt helping me none
    but when i do see her
    and grasp her hand into mine
    all my problems
    just vanish and no longer exist
    no more worries
    not with her at my side!
    I am Thief
    I was to steal her heart
    but she stole mine first
    without even trying...
    without even knowing!
    no longer do i have to put on a show
    trying to convince everybody that i'm happy
    cuz now i am
    just for seeing her once
    then i get all.....lighthearted.
    everyday i fall more and more in love with her
    but does she know that?
    but i blame myself
    for not telling her that i love her
    but i fear that if i start now....
    she might not respond back.........
    at this moment i cant afford for that to happen
    because my heart feels to good
    if she leaves....
    will i go back to my old ways?
    will i cut deeper than i ever attempted?
    will i go for suicide?
    oh the possibilities of what could happen!

    Submitted on 2006-12-04 09:34:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Interesting. I bet the lady you are talking about is very lucky for having you, since it seems you appreciate her very much. I like this. Good job, and I like how you incoprorate your alias in there to.
    | Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]

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