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    dots Submission Name: victim of suidicedots
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    Author: Jimi James
    ASL Info:    24/m/somehwere
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 90/78/41
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1214
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       er i had tea today i think ill have tea again, tomorrow.
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    dotsvictim of suidicedots
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    Never he stared birds
    all his cogitations denied
    his hands in front of his eyes
    he waited for miracles to collide

    Never he listened to waterfalls
    now that he heard his blood leak
    he scattered his belief
    and turned his other cheek

    Never he was to use his mind
    he never returned questions
    bought himself a chariot
    for the heart his chest runs

    Never he was too sure that the thoughts he had
    were the ones that he just had thought of
    so he forgot about dread




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