Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: victim of suidicedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Jimi James
    ASL Info:    24/m/somehwere
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 90/78/41
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1239
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 585



    Description:
       er i had tea today i think ill have tea again, tomorrow.
    or maybe thats not a good idea.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsvictim of suidicedots
    -------------------------------------------


    Never he stared birds
    all his cogitations denied
    his hands in front of his eyes
    he waited for miracles to collide

    Never he listened to waterfalls
    now that he heard his blood leak
    he scattered his belief
    and turned his other cheek

    Never he was to use his mind
    he never returned questions
    bought himself a chariot
    for the heart his chest runs

    Never he was too sure that the thoughts he had
    were the ones that he just had thought of
    so he forgot about dread




    Submitted on 2006-12-04 10:46:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    127408

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    My Four Seasons written by faideddarkness
    Love written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    no words for how graceful you are in this moment written by Daniel Barlow
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    Fasade written by jackz
    Cover written by saartha
    prison written by ShyOne
    Shut Up written by annie0888
    Records I written by Raphael
    Deep Into A World Of Despair written by DeathTone
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    the testing of hypotheses written by Daniel Barlow
    Carry written by saartha
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    Silent Screams In Silent Dreams written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    To the Devil and Candle written by HisNameIsNoMore
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    a safe place written by Daniel Barlow
    untitled written by ShyOne
    Etiquette written by saartha

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry