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    dots Submission Name: Your Spelldots
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    Author: Amanda Lynn
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 332/193/56
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       a very distructive relationship...


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    dotsYour Spelldots
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    You cast your spell upon me.
    Your tainted words flow free.
    I can feel your bonds around me.
    I can feel them holding me.
    You torture me so sweetly,
    with each and every breath.
    I hand my soul to you neatly,
    and watch as you disregard the rest.
    Your eyes hold me captive,
    and Im a willing prisoner.
    You bathe me in your voice,
    and Im a mesmerized listener.
    You wrap yourself around me,
    bringing my defences down.
    Your face is all I see,
    there is nothing else around.
    I no longer care about the past,
    the future holds nothing for me.
    I just long for this spell to never end,
    i long for the bonds that hold me,
    that control me,
    that make me belong to you,
    make me long for you,
    and your spell lingers...




    Submitted on 2006-12-04 13:00:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a captivating and charmingly hypnotic piece and, also, soooo romantic...well and very deftly done ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      good job!! love can be a crazy self destructive thing!!! like i know anything about it im only 15 but w/e! good job!
    ~akaila~
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      nice work, a lot of truth in what you write about people in love, where the one is weak, under the spell and the other person domminant pulling the strings. that,s love.
    gerry
    | Posted on 2006-12-05 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very good...i could come up with different thoughts on it..or put myself into it in many different ways...good job..martha
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by Martha McEntire | [ Reply to This ]


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