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    dots Submission Name: The little thingsdots
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    Author: elseibi
    ASL Info:    20/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 228/180/38
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I didn't really plan this (as if i ever do lol) as always i jst wrote whatever popped into my head. Feel free to criticise it and make corrections. I always love feedback (constructive or complimentative, it doesnae matter). Thanks for reading this. xxx

    ~lou~


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    dotsThe little thingsdots
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    It's the little things in life,
    that make it all worth while,
    those tiny little things,
    at which you cannot help but smile.

    This could be,
    a random joke with friends,
    that no one else understands,
    or a picture with memories,
    of holidays in foreign lands.

    Simply seeing a robin red,
    stop to watch you passing by,
    can bring a grin to your face,
    you've gotta love that natural high.

    Enjoy the little things in life,
    dont just let them pass you by,
    for the little things in life,
    can make you laugh or make you cry.

    Live life to the full,
    enjoy every moment,
    let yourself be happy,
    even for a second,
    life's here to enjoy,
    so smile,
    the world's not as dark as you think,
    just look out,
    for the little things,
    and they'll look out,
    for you.











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      Great poem, Lou! I enjoyed reading it...Delightful piece. : ) ; ) ; )
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is what I got out of another piece of yours, & commented about it! That other commenter was right when they called you some kind of sage. The import of this poem (for me, an old guy who hates clichés!) is that some people like them because they know what they mean; and so I ought to get off my high horse. Reading your work here is being quite an experience for this reader. It is above the normal approach of criticizing verse, what you seem to do with it. I mean (to put it bluntly) that you have a luminous spirit with you and need to trust its leadership whatever happens and remember the good luck fades if you get conceited.
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      Cliches are repeated because they're true, I guess. I'm not normally a fan of the "it's all right, everything works out" method; but that could be because people suspect me of being a robot!!!

    Keep writing, or we'll send the Service after you.

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2006-12-08 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      a cliché in much of poetry, but for good reason, because this is so true. Your flow through this is very nice and not too complicated. It made me smile because I just thought of all those little things and got all warm and fuzzy inside. I really like this opposed to so much of the angst stuff being posted. keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by dawfemme | [ Reply to This ]
      This was great, Lou! It's philisophical, but "Oh, so true"! The grand, magnificient accomplishments or events come at rare intervals, and often are a "long time in between"! The little things fill life's journey, and are the source of our greatest pleasures! Nice write, Lou!
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Sound advice here for everyone Louise. Very well put together and written,

    It is very simple, clear, and very good indeed.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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