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Perfect Little Boy


Author: Lynda
ASL Info:    26/F
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Words: 194
Class/Type: Lyrics /Misc
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Perfect Little Boy



Blond hair and blue eyes
Just like his father
She's sure he'll be perfect
So why's she afraid

In three months
She'll get to meet him
But will she be perfect
To the son that they’ve made

No mother is perfect they say

Will he love her at first
Will he know she’s his mom
Will he cry or laugh
When she gets to take him home
Her questions repeat
As they run through her mind
“Will I be good Mom?
Oh God, please send me a sign”

A couple years later
She sleds down the snow hill
With the little blond toddler
Who laughs as they play

He looks up
and says “Mom, I love you”
Lets go of her jacket
And stumbles away

Life sure seemed perfect that day

He loved her at first
He called out for mom
He slept on her chest
When she got to take him home
Her questions were gone
His love filled her mind
When he said “Mom I love you”
She knew God sent her a sign

She said "that perfect little boy is mine"




Submitted on 2006-12-04 13:56:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like it. I'm no critique artist so I just say Yea, I liked it.

Thanks,

~bigrig0625~
| Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by bigrig0625 | [ Reply to This ]


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