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    dots Submission Name: happiness isn't real!dots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Rant/The pain inside
    Total Views: 578
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1078



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       just talked to my girlfriend and she wants to break up....i feel so fuckin mad....oh well lifes a bitch


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    dotshappiness isn't real!dots
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    maybe this was fate
    this hellhole called Life, nothing but a torture device specially made for me and all others that GOD has no use for.
    when will we be able to grasp happiness and be able to hold on to it and not lose it in the end? when shall we have it in our grasp and never have to let go?
    i'll tell you when....
    NEVER!! hapiness isn't real!
    trust me my friends, i sigh because i see nothing in her eyes. i sigh because happiness is nothing but an illusion to trick thy heart and play a couple of games with it.
    you only feel good for the moment and you let thy gaurd down so you may enjoy it for a while.....then BAM....it hits you again .....deppression!
    am i wrong?
    of course i may but i know im not...because you watch me as i watch myself die the exact same way you wish not to die!
    was that too confusing for you? then read it slower and try to understand it more!!

    will she ever be able to see any of my writings? if she does.....then she would feel guilty....maybe too guilty.




    Submitted on 2006-12-04 14:02:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Not sure on WTF you were on that day...I mean I knew you were bummed out but....well anyway as with all your work....you should have talked to her at least tried to fix things...
    | Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by Slayer X9000 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...this is super deep.
    I kinda' felt the same way after my heartbreak...
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by xgirlxbassistx | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is deep. sorrowful and sad, u hit heartbreak right in the head. good job!
    Write on,
    Lanna
    | Posted on 2006-12-08 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]


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