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    dots Submission Name: The Angry Fishdots
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    Author: Fryingpan
    ASL Info:    15/M/England
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 11/18/13
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Angry Fishdots
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    I saw a fish swimming
    Along the river bed
    I thought it looked funny
    So i patted its head

    It was much bigger
    than i'd taken it for
    It bit off my arm
    There was lots of gore

    For that fish was a really angry fish that just happened to have lots of teeth and like to bite ppls arms off and then spit them out

    Remember kids : looks can be decieving!




    Submitted on 2006-12-04 15:12:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      haha. this is simply great.
    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by stasisindarknes | [ Reply to This ]
      intreasting. clean the flow up a bit, it gets kinda weird at the end. but its cute and it made me smile.it has a deeper meaning then just about fish. nice!
    Write on,
    Lanna
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]
      kinda childish....
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]


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