Whoever says that they don't enjoy a good bout of lust is lying. When in lust you allow yourself to make decisions that you know are absolutely wrong. It's kind of like Loves Satan.
Wow, this really hit home. It makes me think of my love, well it would if I wasn't already thinking about him all the time. Anyway, point is, this was written well and awesome. It flowed nicely, rhymed well, and the emotion was portrayed nicely. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading
The repetition deffinatly does comply to the point. I have to agree, with the irregular rhyme somewhat diminishes the read, because it doesn't possess a consistent flow.
I'm not a big fan of love poems, but Love is something I've experienced so at times I don't mind reading some. expecially yours. you yet again, did a splendid job at portraying your emotions through words.
The repetition fortifies the impression. However the rhyme is irregular, some places you have it, some places you don't. That makes the flow a little of too. I like the idea but I'm not keen on reading love poems much. It's not exactly my style.