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    dots Submission Name: Dirty lil poemsdots

    Author: elseibi
    ASL Info:    20/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 228/180/38
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       This one's to Ron, in response to your poem...
    (which i swear was so full of innuendo he should be ashamed hehe)

    Just thought id give your poem a lil spot here too Ron...


    Moist simply means
    "slightly wet",
    I hope to be
    but I ain't yet!!" "

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    dotsDirty lil poemsdots

    Dirty little poems,
    by dirty little friends,
    they must have dirty little minds,
    and dirty little pens,
    their dirty little secrets,
    are hid by dirty little blinds,
    but you can see them if you look,
    in their dirty little eyes.

    Submitted on 2006-12-04 17:23:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was adorable! it had really tightly wound meter and rhyme, something i normally can't stand, but you made this fun! it kind of put a picture in my head of people passing "interesting" notes to eachother at school. hehe. (blush) but yeah, this had much repetition, but because of the size of the poem, it didn't get old. or sickening. just dirty. once i was 'challenged' to write something with meter and rhyme. and it was supposed to be mushy, so i wrote something similiar to this, but i got called an electrophile. heh. you should read it, it's called "i'm in love with my machines."

    | Posted on 2007-08-26 00:00:00 | by freddybuzzkill | [ Reply to This ]
      Hehehehehe I have a dirty mind hehehehehehe
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by FreeBird | [ Reply to This ]
      I like 'fish-slap' !
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      Short but meaningful. You've got an interesting method, Lou--get right to the point and fish-slap the audience with it. Keep up the good work.

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2006-12-08 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      Cute poem dear!
    Made my day
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by _LexyMeNow_ | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha! Slightly incriminating, but cute, with good rhyme and meter! *slap* got me back!
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I dig it, cause i'm a dirty lil person, lol. great job!
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]

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